The Storyline Service. Epic Stories.

[UltaFlame]

i like to write stories, and lacking any skills other than that required for game making, i'd help people who are being stumped in terms of a good story, either just to begin a good twist or anything, im sure i can come up with something.

Note: I may not be able to help you, although i am about 99% sure i can, i just can't guarantee results... but you'll probably get them.

sometimes i come up with a good character, or a good subplot, or a good hidden plot, and i'll post it here for people to use, or maybe some other stuff, like miscellaneous(sp?) 'facts' about how a certain world/universe works. or maybe a good description for an attack which a spriter could then make. or somethin, ya i like to help in these area, although Story is my specialty. anyway just request some help.

but dont ask for help with events or scripts for that go to Blizzard or any of the other people good with that stuff, just a warning i couldn't get my first event to work on all 4 games i tried to start ok?

if your worried about the story being stolen or anything, ask whomever it is who helped you to delete the post when ur done with it. or if you want ask someone to help you out Via pm. We want you to be satisfied!

Junior Members:
NOBODY!


these are people who have had many negative results. I am thinking about taking this out cuz it singles out the less *cant think of a proper word* skillful(?) of the helpers, if enough people agree with me, ill take it out, 2 other people would be enough...


Middle Helpers:

UltaFlame(Area of interests: History, plot twists, subplots, Psychology(only a little bit.) i might be able to help with Cryptic messages)

Lore
Interests: Horror, Fantasy
Times: I live in Canada, Eastern Time. WEEKDAY SERVICE: 4PM-6PM WEEKEND SERVICES: 12PM-7PM (usually)

Valcos (AOI: Idea Man, HE GIVES IDEAS! IF YOU ONLY NEED IDEAS, PLEASE ASK HIM {the caps were a message from Ulta})

Seaniorsr(Area of interests: Storyline/Serious, plot twists, plots, I also like making hidden messages...you know to shake the player a bit.I also sometimes like making prologues and stroy scenes.(But not telling you how to write the script!)just what could be said in the scene. Active Time: 6 p.m. mountain time-10 p.m.

Legacyblade (Area of interests: My BEST area is character, though I'm also interested in worldbuilding (coming up with history, regions, creatures, magic systems, cultures, etc.), and love to work with plot as well. However, I really don't want to help people improve their cut scenes or dialog. (though I can do that too))

Diokatsu, click this for his stuff.

if you would like to help just post or send me a pm stating you would like to. and, i'm gonna make a 'senior helpers' list, for those who have had positive results 5 times in a row, likewise if the opposite happens (negative results) 10 times in a row then the 'senior helpers' would be put on this list and people on this list would be put on a 'junior helpers' list, if they get 10 more negative results in a row, they get taken off that list and can still be asked, just won't be put on this first post, so im not denying anyone the right to help. if you see somethin and you just want to help someone do so. you don't have to be on the list to help . oh and the 5 positives or 10 negatives in a row have to be from different people! if anyone has any complaints about these rules pm me please.

the list is for people who would like to be put on there so they can be contacted whenever someone wants their specific help.

Senior Helpers:
NOBODY!


these are people who have been extremely helpful, they've gotten enough positive feedback/results to be considered one of the best, if this list gets too full (im sure it will cuz the people here rock!) ill make a 'elite helpers' list it'll be very hard to get into this list. these people may have been known to eb the best, but if your in the mood for choosin a list/particular person to help please don't ALWAYS pick these people, im sure plenty of people on the previous list would be just as great, however choose who ya want...


HEY EVERYONE! Guess what. You can contact me on my MSN: UltaFlame@Hotmail(dot)com, so if you need help, you can find me on there most of the time. If I can't help you, I'll let you know.

[Lost_Hope]

i'm here!

[UltaFlame]

AWESOME!!!

this forum style is gonna take some getting used to.

[Fantasist]

Yes, and yay for sticky

[Sally]

yea it might, and u know what wired?

everyone who is posting is a mod... mostly...

[Nortos]

congrats on ur mods guys  and gl with your service again

[UltaFlame]

ever need help come here and we will (:

[Sally]

[Pliio8]

Hi, umm, people say that my story is complete crap as in, too confusing and it makes no sense. Can you help me?

Story: The time is 19XX, in a somewhat fuedal world. A long time ago, in wartime a women Named Arastovia created a book that held her ideaology, and with this she stopped the wars and caused 2 millinea of peace. But then a young boy who lived in the city St. Arastovia witnessed his girlfriend being killed and his life destroyed, whenever his home city was attacked.

Later he learns that Arastovia hid a message in her book, a spell of how to restore peace. The rebel's, what the antagonist are called, attack more cities before he reads this message in Arastovia's old home, and is quickly transported to Arastovia's time. When meeting her after stirring a whole lot of trouble, A warmster of a kingdom kills Arastovia and burns here not yet finished book, severly screwing up the future. The buy returns to his time only to learn that the Rebel's now have a plot to blow up his home continent. He infiltraits the base and stops the leader of the Rebel's, but soon after the continent gets blown up. He is only of 4 survivors. The credits roll and the game ends.

I hope that that was not to long.

[UltaFlame]

umm... yeah, it needs work, its quite confusing, and yes, it doesnt make much sense... but this is as an overall, it seems like u could make the entire game take up a matter of thirty minutes, which isnt good.

ok I think i like the idea of his girlfriend dieing and his city being razed, thats good, however, your gonna need to come up with an explanation on how he got there, if its just reading the book that causes it, your gonna need to really make that scene incredible.

and it seems like his adventures in the past should be the main part, possibly him trying to find Arastovia, following clues and helping people in trouble, gaining a few allies along the way, making many enemies, after a while, he feels he is finally closing in on Arastovia, and right before that, a bunch of the guys he fought in thepast appear and try to kill him, the boys allies hold them off as he rushes into a building, where he believes Arastovia is currently, and meets her there, but then we hear an agonized death scream, and Arastovia and the boy turn around and see the Warmaster guy there, the boy lifts his sword, and fights the Warmaster, but is easily defeated, we then see a battle between Arastovia and the Warmaster, Arastovia is winning, but then the guys the boy fought in the past kill his allies, and charge into the room, knowing she is then outmatched, she uses the last part of her power to send the boy back to his hometime.

he is in the house from before, but the book is gone, and he knows he seriously messed up, he then hears of Rebel's plans to destroy his continent, he finds a runaway Lieutenant of theres, who leads the boy to there hideout, in a last ditch effort they rally the survivors of his hometown, and launch a final assault on the building, they break the enemy lines, but only the boy and the lieutenant survived.

the boys family had died long ago.

with cold resolve, they head into the building, and work there way through the enemy ranks, finding the leader of Rebel, whom battles you, and you lose, he then kills the lieutenant, causing the boy to go on a rampage, and a power from within erupts, a power, the boss notes, that is similar to Arastovia's, you then battle again and win.

a single whisper reaches the boys ear 'you have done well, but you are not finished yet with your mission' the boy then notices that the boss had pushed a button, initiating the sequence to annihalate his continent, stealing a zeppelin(or whatever is used to fly) he barely manages to escape and looks on as his continent sinks to the depths, shattered, broken, and uninhabitable.


and i was thinking... we make two different stories...

I mean, the Warlord fight is where it starts, its gonna be designed for the guys who play to not be able to win, but if they manage to... then an Alternate event happens, in which Arastovia survives, and you stay in the past, trained under Arastovia to go back to the future, to prevent Rebel's actions, and under her guidance, you decide to stay in the past indefinitely, however it is not allowed, and Arastovia sends you back to your time, however, with him, are his allies from the past, and together, they manage to defeat the Rebel Base, afterwards, the Boss shows up, and they battle, and are initially defeated, then they all show the power that the boy does in the original ending, and the boss guy shows a similar power, and the fight is more doable, but hard. ridiculously hard, should be extremely hard to win

if u do win, then the boss dies, and your village and allies manage to escape the exploding continent.

if u lose, you guys barely manage to escape yourselves, and the boss guy is still alive, however ur village is lost entirely.


it could use some more expansion, but atleast now we have an idea, thats more than a confusing pile of not understandable words.

[Pliio8]

I do have all of it and the game is planned to be 60 hours long, I just gave the jist of it. David, the protagonist, heads through a forest where his girfriend's, Ilane's, father planted a tree. An axeman cuts down the tree which severly po's Ilane, you batle him and win. He is the first boss.

After the razing, you head with a caravan to David's city, where the book is held in a teasury. You overhear the king talking about another attack, on his city. You sneak into the treasury and steal the book, then that city is attacked. You meet up with a fortune teller who says that the power within the book is gone, and must be restored. After wtnessing more attacks and restoring the power at three location, you go back in time.

Now in the past, your party will nickname this time perdiod dread. You go to multiple dungeons in order to get the ability to sail. After stirring up trouble you find arastovia's house. She is killed by the Warmaster of a kingdom. The warmaster sends you back through time to your home time where noone is seen. After finding survivors on your home continenet in Elegy, the third time period, you assault the rebel base. After destroying MaRYl, the computer Ai of the base, you sonfront Sigiel, the leader of the rebels. Before he dies he activates the bomb and you manage to escape with no time to spare. Roll credits.

[Nortos]

60hrs long seems bit unrealistic (especially if solo project) but gl if you have the dedication

[Blizzard]

You will need many huge maps. My maps are average 40x40, I have over 400 and about 10 hours of straight gameplay (without side quests).

[Pliio8]

You will need many huge maps. My maps are average 40x40, I have over 400 and about 10 hours of straight gameplay (without side quests).

I've already made a game that had 353 maps, and had 30 hours of gameplay.

[Blizzard]

Then you know what's incoming.

[magic2345]

Wait, wait, wait. 30 hrs?!?! 
Your maps must be really really huge and have many sidequests.....

[UltaFlame]

ah, well if u have everything planned, why you need to come here? so any particular aspectr you want some help on?

[Pliio8]

ah, well if u have everything planned, why you need to come here? so any particular aspectr you want some help on?

People still say that the storyline is too confusing and thats why I came here in the first place.

[UltaFlame]

it seems oddly short for a 60 hr game... however while short to me, atleast, it doesnt seem confusing... some parts dont make total sense, but as a whole I don't believe its confusing, ill reread it however.

[Valcos]

I was just wondering is this post still active? Or no? Because I was think of getting some help to see how my storyline is coming along.

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