Is this coming out good?

[wolfi--]

This is a song i made and it's not quite done and i just want you guys to tell me if it's going good or is it bad ;-;
It will stop after 2 mins cuz yeah, i didn't remove bars so it's not actually a big 4 min thing.
For those who are fans of heavy metal, they may not like this much. It's called "Slow" itself, so yeah. Also, i know the ending sucks but i want you to tell if something else sucks.


And be true while telling me, don't be a blizzard.


http://www.sendspace.com/file/mfzj64

[Phasedscar]

Sounds good.

got a couple of suggestions though.  Turn the treble down a bit so that the base can come through more, it tends to get drowned out.  Also, there's a bit too much of a lag between 0:30 and 0:42, I'd have a small base line in there to transition into the rest of the base.  Also, I noticed you have a couple of cords that clash a little bit with eachother, try seperating them into a different cleft and insterment (another string would do nicely, something still fairly high toned but keeps a lower note, maybe a violin?)  Just a few suggestions though.

Overall though I really like, you've done a good job!

[Blizzard]

And be true while telling me, don't be a blizzard.

Now you've hurt my feelings and I won't listen to it. ._.

[Phasedscar]

I think he means you're just too nice  :-\

[Blizzard]

Well, I am usually telling him that it's ok and where he can improve it. There's no need to say "OMG IT SUCKS" if it doesn't.

[wolfi--]

I THINK I MEANT TO SAY THAT HE WAS A LIAR OH SORRY HE IS AN ADMIN KTHXBI



Thanks for the suggestions Phase.
But i haven't added a bass yet (ofcourse i plan too though i suck at it)

I'll follow your suggestions and add a violin.
But first i need to extend this a little :O

[Calintz]

Lol, I'll check it out when I get home from school.