The Storyline Service. Worldbuilding, Plots, Characters & Internal Consistency!

[legacyblade]

He didn't say RMXP games, Dio, he said games. And yes, most of them are made by a team. Even RMXP games often use graphics created by other people, or at least the RTP. That could be called a team

Besides, lethal yarn isn't making a story heavy game. The story seems about as important to his game as (what I've heard) stories in porn. When I help someone, I usually just ask them questions about things, and occasionally offer a few possible routes to go in creating the basic situation. Besides, even if the concept and characters were made for you, you have to WRITE the story. Like fanfiction. It's not a good concept that makes a story, it's good writing and presentation. A BAD concept will hurt it, but I've read plenty of stories with amazingly awesome and epic premises with great characters. But it fell through on the actual writing.

So to sum it up: who cares

[Lethal-Yarn]

Besides, lethal yarn isn't making a story heavy game. The story seems about as important to his game as (what I've heard) stories in porn.

Haha, that's an awesome comparison.

[Diokatsu]

You should realize that's you're all fucking retarded for going along with the premise that I was actually trying to make a point in the first place.

[legacyblade]

You should realize you're retarded for thinking I was actually doing anything other than arguing because I was bored

Honestly, why else would I bring porn into it? I was bored

[Diokatsu]

Isn't it funny how everyone seems to be doing the exact same thing I'm doing in response to me? That always seems to happen.

You might want to learn to give better indicators, since your diction is bad for trolling. In short, you're a bad writer.

[winkio]

You sir, fail for still posting in this thread.

[Vell]

Dio, You're a good person and all and I'ma let you finish, but get the hell out of my thread unless you have a reason to be here >:U

[legacyblade]

Dio, people do that to mock you. Imitation in such a way doesn't mean they admire your wit.

[Vell]

LB, I have a request. If anyone from now on posts offtopic and keeps it going for more than 4 posts in a row, Delete the posts and stuff, please? I don't want people posting in here asking for a request and coming back the next day having to sift through a page and a half of useless not-conversation to find their assistance. It's bad for business.

[legacyblade]

I would, but I can only delete my posts.

[winkio]

I'll keep watch for you Ulta.

[Vell]

Thanks Wink. 'Pologies, Legacy, I forgot 'Moderator' here means the moderator mods only one forum.

[Shalaren]

Hey! I wonder if you can help me out with a game Im making!
I got the story but its not organized.. its all messed up and X: well.
not organized

A Hidden city ruled by the King Remus, named Shalaren Metropolis is the one city that have protected earth for centuries from the Mystical might of the Next world. for that King Remus has discovered an ancient technique to keep the doors to the next world closed. a technique which is called "The Void". The Void has a million sides to it, but only a couple are possible to be learned, all Shalaren's citizens were furced to learn the Void, is if they are all slaves to earth protections. but so, to learn the Void you must have a Shalarenian blood in you. King Remus have learned that he had the right blood to master the Void, to be strong like god, by possesing the lost souls of the next world inside of him and gaining their strength, and so he became stronger day by day. King Remus was once known as world's protector, but now known as world's biggest concern. King Remus goal is not to protect the world anymore, but is to rull it. the people of Shalaren Metropolis began to lose faith in their king, Remus's son, Kathel went against his father as well. Shalaren Metropolis was made to defeat the Mystical might of the Next world, but now its being controlled by it. A war has begun, and the city was no longer Hidden from the world, Shalaren against its own king, destroying everything around in the city, or out of it. Remus has lost contol of his powers and was unable to stop, Remus was now the strongest Man on earth. he has killed all those who did not like his ways.

A week after The king has mastered the Void, his son came by to his room to discuss about world's protection, "who cares about the world? my son, we have everything we need in Shalaren! what is it for us, if none knows about our existence?", those were Remus words, Remus cares no more about the world, he only cares about the strength he can get with his position. Kathel had no choice, but to go against his father.

More will be written later.

quick summary:
Kathel and a group of people secretly made Shalaren's Council. to stand against the king.. who is now rolling the world. the game goes by as you being one of the people insde that group.

ps. it is a floating Island o-o
Anyway! it ends up with the Island exploading because of Remus... didnt think of how yet.. X:
and the Island brakes into 5 parts all around the world,  and there starts a new chapter which i dont have to work on right now.. im only working on the first chapter of the game.

X: I like got the story.. but the way i have it all in mind is all messed X:

[ShadowPierce]

->Hi there, Pierce here... I was about to add some more to the story of Wipe when I noticed that my main characters' bios were very VERY Kingdom Hearts-ish... I was wondering if you could do some improvements... If you don't know what to alter, it would be best to read the story of the game to have a little background... BTW, I'll have the parts that can't be changed in bold and red. Also, only the bios are to be changed unless your suggestions are great...

Here they are:

Rayse: ShowHide

Name: Rayse
Age: 22
Race: Human (Arcanist)
Gender: Male
Class: Mage
Preferred Weapon: Staff
Main Element: N/A
Bio:

   Rayse is an energetic & talented Arcanist who just graduated from the Magic Academy with friends Rhia & Vinz. He always wanted to be a member of The Spell Circle. He always talks about how a great Spellmaster (member of The Spell Circle) he would be, but easily loses focus. Unlike those who were assigned to retrieve the Mana Stone, he volunteered hoping that it will help his chances to becoming a Spellmaster. He is the destined hero of this game.

Rhia: ShowHide

Name: Rhia
Age: 122 yrs.
Race: Forest Elf
Gender: Female
Class: Mage
Preferred Weapon: Staff
Main Element: Wind
Bio:

   Rhia is an honor student in the Magic Academy & long time friend of Rayse & Vinz. She keeps score of the two every time they compete with each other. Despite being a forest elf, she left her village & decided to learn magic than hunt with a bow like most forest elves. Rhia became friends with Rayse & Vinz when she rescued them from a wild Kergan when the two were just little. Though she's usually calm ,at times, she can get pretty loud when she's annoyed.

Vinz: ShowHide

Name: Vinz
Age: 22
Race: Human
Gender: Male (Arcanist)
Class: Mage
Preferred Weapon: Staff
Main Element: Dark
Bio:

   Vinz is an exceptional Mage, able to cast mid-level spells as a freshman. He is calm, but whenever there is competition, he jumps straight at it & usually faces Rayse in the finals. Vinz is the grandson of Spellmaster Seth, one of the original founders of The Spell Circle. He is moody, which annoys Rhia, and ends up either being cheered up by Rayse or having a dare with him. He doesn't really care much about his future, knowing that his grandfather is a Spellmaster. He'd rather hang out with Rayse & Rhia than learn advance-level spells from Spellmaster Seth.

Waiting for your kind replies...


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[ShadowPierce]

->May I politely ask if someone is still reading this thread? I can really use some help... Thanks!


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[Vell]

I check it when I show up, but my muse has been gone for a long while, so you can't really expect much from me right now...

[ShadowPierce]

->Affirmative... I'll be patient then...


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[ShadowPierce]

->Anyone still looking at this thread? Anyone with ideas for improvement...

Thanks!


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[arialks]

this thread is dead.

[Vell]

This thread gets activity whenever it's needed. It doesn't 'die' I see if this thread has any posts whenever I come in. Just lately(months) I've not been much help to anyone in particular. Your story needs to inspire me, I guess, if you want my help. Or I can't help you out, it seems.

But no. This thread is not dead.