[XP] Necrofear

[Reygekan]

I want EVERYTHING criticized I'd rather the focus not necessarily be on mapping, but as I said, it's one of those things I want improved, and the more little things people point out, the more I can do. I'm not going to reject any kind of criticism, save for a repeat of the same criticism.

[phillip1756]

the download isn't workin for me it keeps saying processing download request or something and then it says click here to download even thought i already did click

[impulszero]

First thing: im trying to not be an ass here.
Second thing: I think that everybody who want to be a game desinger should download and play this. It's a great example of how game SHOULD NOT look.
From maping to dialog, over the battle: it sucks.

-Maping is simply bad, there is no question or arguing about it.-it-just-sucks-

-Dialoge: I dont know how to describe this. It's like generated swearword mix. And epicly boring. I swear, i never seen a bad dialog such as yours. I mean there is a point when you insert one ore two swearwords, and there is a point when is just over-the-top. And every time Vice says something, its over-the-top. I lost will to read anything after 3-4 dialoge.

-Music: It's good, it's sounds great it's epic, but it's a miss. It dosent fit into cut-scenes, dont fit into battles... well it just dont fit. I mean i just dont feel the tension/danger or anything. (Maybe it's just me, so ignore this). Battle Music sound really epic, but it's too epic for just fighting a ghost and a bag of bones. And since first dialog is a way it is,  i dont see how village music can fit as a background.

-Battle: Boring.

-Charaters: Where? i just saw the the-F-man (Vice) so sound like broken gramophone and repeats the F word, and a girl (Eva), who (i think) trying to get F-man's good side (i think)...

-Story: I wont coment this since i think story (for change) can be good.

Overall: 10/10 as epic failure.
Am sorry, but this is just that bad.
I wasted about 8 min. to download, and about 20 min. to play, and dear god, i dont wanna to do this twice (second part especially)

Now, am sorry if i insulted you (on any way), am not too much of a chat-guy and stuff, and am usualy lazy to write any long comment (or to write at all). How so ever, playing this for 20 min. caused such impact on me that i just could help it. I know it's a demo/alpha/whatever but it is (way too much) bad.

PS: i hope my english was understandable

[Reygekan]

Thanks for the critique

Edit: Just so nobody thinks I'm being snarky here
That might sound like an odd thing to say, but every issue that's brought up is something that I know needs a fix. For example, I've had half a dozen people tell me to fix my mapping. So the mapping will get fixed. You obviously aren't a fan of the dialogue, and considering how old the dialogue is at that portion of the game, I agree, it needs to be rewritten. The cuss words might be too much, so I can either tone Vice down, or introduce Eva earlier and characterize her a lot more since the game is lacking in the storytelling department. When you say combat sucks, that means I need more enemies and more introductory skills to start it off with depth, etc.,

So throw your worst at me. This is still the skeleton, I need all the criticism I can before I start adding muscle, tissue, and skin.

Edit 2: Phillip, I just tested both of the downloads and they're working fine for me. When it says "click to download" just click on that and see if it doesn't fix your issue.