Usually it's the author's job to take care of contradictions.
It's good, Ulta... it describes her feelings quite well. For the length of your piece, I'd say it's quite good. However, I don't think the sentence length was varied enough, and you didn't describe what she looked like, aside from mentioning that she was a warrior. Now, you should, of course, do physical descriptions somewhat discreetly. Let me try...
"The wind whistled in her ears." to
"As it carried across her graceful features, the wind played with her wavy, brown hair, and whistled in her ears." The problem with this, is, your piece is too dark. So we could change this idea to...
"The gentle wind carried across her once-radiant features, to twirl about in her raven hair, and to whisper harsh words to her gentle ears." That was fun to write. But, you know, you're the author, and it's your story... and your words. Hopefully I've helped in some way, though.
You also forgot to describe the environment, and time of day. I imagined a sunset, but it could've just as easily been nighttime. It's good that you put in an ocean, but how was the sky?
"She stared across the ocean, looking quietly as the life-giving orb of the sun set quietly beneath the horizon."
Though, you might want to do something that helps outline her fall... So, perhaps it would be more like:
"She stared at the dimming sun as it fell below the horizon, passing rule over the sky to the moon, and to the dark of night."
Again, though, it's not my right to say what should and shouldn't be in your writing. Just offering suggestions
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Oh, by the way...
Quote...and she stared over the ocean. Her eyes were closed