Constructive Critism Needed on T-Screen

Started by Tazero, February 08, 2009, 07:12:22 pm

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Tazero

February 08, 2009, 07:12:22 pm Last Edit: February 20, 2009, 05:57:28 pm by MetaKnight
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Calintz

February 08, 2009, 07:46:23 pm #1 Last Edit: February 08, 2009, 07:48:36 pm by Calintz16438
Hmm...
I don't know. It looks pretty good to me actually. Let me take a deeper look...

EDIT:
Only real suggestion that I have...
- Move the text slightly up to make the vertical space equal to the horizontal space between the text and the edges of the picture.


Tazero

Can't :/ didnt use photoshop......Ms painted most of it


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Calintz

In that case...you did an awesome job.
Have you taken a look at mine yet? Yours is just as good. It just has it's own feel to it.

Aqua

It sucks.  There, harsh "critism"...  :roll:

You betta have the permission of that person... lol

Hm... I don't like the lower quality-ness of the whole thing... like around the edges of her face.  And it really makes the eyes look bad.  Did you just use the paint tool and throw color everywhere?

The text doesn't really blend well; maybe add a stroke.  Also... Way to go and block her forehead... :'(

That biiiig empty same color space in the middle right is... uber bad.  FIX!!!

The logo gets cut off a little bit...

G_G

if that was made in ms paint dam thats good.

Make it in photoshop to make it look better.

Reno-s--Joker

:D I reckon it's AWESOME! :whoa:

The crispness of the text doesn't match the pixelled edges of the image. I suggest getting a higher quality image with clear, refined edges to match those of the text. Or else make the text look dodgy like the pic (thus making the whole title screen look a little less cool).

The one sided-ness also bothers me - try to get some balance. :D

Quote from: MetaKnight on February 08, 2009, 07:12:22 pm
Please Leave harsh critism

Are you masochistic??? D:

Starrodkirby86

Lots of the criticism has been mentioned by Aqua, but a lot of it I agree and disagree with.

It sucks.  There, harsh "critism"...   :roll:

Nice. I sense the point that you're saying it needs work. So in that sense it's an agreement.

You betta have the permission of that person... lol

Definitely. Unless if the image is public domain or something. :x

Hm... I don't like the lower quality-ness of the whole thing... like around the edges of her face.  And it really makes the eyes look bad.  Did you just use the paint tool and throw color everywhere?

Low quality my butt.
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I can't find a good low-quality image...But just go on Paint and save something in .jpeg ...

It's in its own style of a title screen. Like a cutout has been used or something...


The text doesn't really blend well; maybe add a stroke.  Also... Way to go and block her forehead...  :'(
I think the text is pretty interesting that it is a negative of what the regular thing is. It doesn't matter if it's blocking the forehead, it could be worse. What significance is there to a forehead?

That biiiig empty same color space in the middle right is... uber bad.  FIX!!!
With what?

The logo gets cut off a little bit...
Yeah. Poor crossbones.




Overall, this title screen doesn't fit this game at all...I would something totally dark like many "Resident Evil" sort of game-styles.
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Also, the text is indeed hard to read. You need to show some of way to making it look nicer, hopefully. I don't know how...

One last thing, I assume you didn't have to edit the image so much because it's done on Paint...If you want nice looking title screens or something you should upgrade to The GIMP or another image editor.  :^_^':

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tSwitch

it looks fine.
even the blank space isn't bad, you don't need to fill the whole screen and/or worry about symmetry.

the text is just really hard to read.


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King Munkey

I think that it is to bright to be a zombie game.
The background kinda blinds me.
But I think for using paint it is pretty good though.

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computerwizoo7

Its pretty good, the red brings out the blue as well, the text needs some work though its hard to read and blurry at some parts but overall this is good!  :^_^':

Xero Shifter

This could be improved drastically. Though I see where you are going with this, the colors are very light. Most zombie games are darker, the light coloring doesn't give it any sort of creepyness. For MS paint this is phenominal, but unfortunately some people playing the game wont realize this and will judge it based upon what they see, not what they know.
If you could change the brightness, and take it down a bit, especially around the edges, but leave her eyes bright, and darken in around her clothes so that it doesn't show quite a full figure, it could make it a lot creepier.
The text would then have to become another color, I see that you just made it negtive, though this can make it easier to see, it doesn't always, and your text seems rather cut up in places. I'm sure its on purpose, but perhaps a bit less cut up would look nicer.
Also as someone already mentioned, I hope you have that persons permission to post their image in your game.
If I had my comp up and running and wasn't using someone elses, i would photoshop it to show you what i mean. Perhaps later though.
Hope this helps, I'm not trying to be mean, so please dont take it that way.
Oh btw: Congradulations, You just lost the game.
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Calintz

If you have a way to add a splatter or blood on her shirt, that could help a little...

Tazero

I made a new one and look closely at the top left corner


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tSwitch

February 12, 2009, 09:51:07 am #14 Last Edit: February 12, 2009, 09:53:04 am by NAMKCOR
Metaknight, unless you drew this artwork, you need to credit the original author.
aside from that it looks pretty good. 
I can't think of anything for criticism to give -you- since you didn't draw the pictures.  (I can see the artist signature blurred out at the bottom)

Quote from: computerwizoo7 on February 11, 2009, 06:36:50 pm
Its pretty good, the red brings out the blue as well, the text needs some work though its hard to read and blurry at some parts but overall this is good!  :^_^':


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computerwizoo7

The second pic looks better for a horror game, it kinda needs some substance though, and a character in the middle fighting them off or just posing and looking cool for the ladies or something...

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Tazero

Either way it's gonna be the second one i use


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Starrodkirby86

Quote from: MetaKnight on February 12, 2009, 04:09:50 pm
Either way it's gonna be the second one i use
Good. I like that one better.

Only thing I feel you can make it better is the way you execute it as the title launches. For example, Zylos's game starts off with a candle lighting up. You can have some effect that appears to show the atmosphere of the title in a perfect manner, since the default way RMXP handles the title is clearly uncool for something like this. ;)

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Tazero

Quote from: Xero Shifter on February 11, 2009, 09:20:48 pm
This could be improved drastically. Though I see where you are going with this, the colors are very light. Most zombie games are darker, the light coloring doesn't give it any sort of creepyness. For MS paint this is phenominal, but unfortunately some people playing the game wont realize this and will judge it based upon what they see, not what they know.
If you could change the brightness, and take it down a bit, especially around the edges, but leave her eyes bright, and darken in around her clothes so that it doesn't show quite a full figure, it could make it a lot creepier.
The text would then have to become another color, I see that you just made it negtive, though this can make it easier to see, it doesn't always, and your text seems rather cut up in places. I'm sure its on purpose, but perhaps a bit less cut up would look nicer.
Also as someone already mentioned, I hope you have that persons permission to post their image in your game.
If I had my comp up and running and wasn't using someone elses, i would photoshop it to show you what i mean. Perhaps later though.
Hope this helps, I'm not trying to be mean, so please dont take it that way.
Oh btw: Congradulations, You just lost the game.


Agreed I'll try to darken all of em' up a bit....




It sucks.  There, harsh "critism"...  :roll:
Explain

You betta have the permission of that person... lol
Public domain royalty free

Hm... I don't like the lower quality-ness of the whole thing... like around the edges of her face.  And it really makes the eyes look bad.  Did you just use the paint tool and throw color everywhere?

Internet edditing software www.picnik.com Not low quality just Posterized with more colors

The text doesn't really blend well; maybe add a stroke.  Also... Way to go and block her forehead... :'(
Ofcourse it doesn't blend it's Blending is set to Difference
That biiiig empty same color space in the middle right is... uber bad.  FIX!!!
Explain graphically please
The logo gets cut off a little bit...
Big whoop?



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Starrodkirby86

This is talking about your FIRST title screen, not the new one. The Zombie Girl one...

Now why am I answering for Aqua? Because I am...

It sucks.  There, harsh "critism"...  :roll:
Explain
Explanation down there. :)

You betta have the permission of that person... lol
Public domain royalty free
Then that's OK. I can't remember if Public Domain needs to be credited, but I don't think so.

Hm... I don't like the lower quality-ness of the whole thing... like around the edges of her face.  And it really makes the eyes look bad.  Did you just use the paint tool and throw color everywhere?

Internet edditing software www.picnik.com Not low quality just Posterized with more colors

That's nice to know.

The text doesn't really blend well; maybe add a stroke.  Also... Way to go and block her forehead... :'(
Ofcourse it doesn't blend it's Blending is set to Difference
Perhaps you can have some stroke on it or something to make it blend more. A border...Doesn't matter.
That biiiig empty same color space in the middle right is... uber bad.  FIX!!!
Explain graphically please
It's as if you're drawing a cool painting or something, but then there's this empty hole. Like, a giant crowd of everything to the left, and then it's just blank...Then again, this is actually a bad argument Aqua is making and it's OK to have some blank spot like that...at least for this sort of picture; not in other ones, no no.
The logo gets cut off a little bit...
Big whoop?
Don't you want your logo to have screen time!? D: :P

What's osu!? It's a rhythm game. Thought I should have a signature with a working rank. ;P It's now clickable!
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